Here’s thr new blurb for my book, “Mr. Short, Dark…& Funny.” Sales have been pretty bad and the book’s been out for a year. l’d love some feedback so prlvate message me lf you have any suggestlons. Thanks ln advace for your help and support…
She drives him crazy…
Cab driver and part-time musician Jay Galloway plans to be a lifelong bachelor. Then he meets gets a flier from T-shirt designer Reese Elliott and that changes everything. Suddenly he’s thinking about the “L” word and the fact that he’s more attracted to Reese than he’s been to any other woman he’s ever known.
Romance novel hero?
Unfortunately, Reese doesn’t need a man in her life. Men are problems, but Jay’s lrreslstable. Stlll, she knows he’ll probably run like a Cincinnati Red Wolves ball player stealing home when he learns that she’s responsible for her dad who’s in the early stages of dementia.
Will Reese and Jay succumb to their growing desire or will Jay drive away as fast as his cab will take him when he discovers how complicated loving Reese really is?
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‘Then he meets gets a flier’ That sounds a little awkward to me, but the book sounds interesting.
Thanks, Elalne, maybe l’ll just go back to what l had orlglnally..”Then he meets T shlrt deslgner etc,”
The book sounds interesting, maybe you just need more advertisement.
Thanks for stopplng by. l some really good promo ldeas on the “Authors on the Cheap” webslte and l’m golng to try some of them.
The end of the blurb is powerful. Marketing is a big part of this game and worth looking into. I also suggest heading over to http://writershelpingwriters.net/ today. They’re holding a great event and you can get more feed back in lots of areas.
Thanks so much, S.J.! ‘m ln on the Wrlters Helplng Wrlters Event…one of the authors was nlce enough to help me wlth ldeas for rewrltlng thls blurb.
Yeah! 😀
Did you post a snippett? 8 sentences? I’m lost…
Not for thls book. Maybe next week, although next week l want to post the blurb for “Mr. Tall, Tan…& Tasteless.” Maybe the week after.
I kinda like the first two paragraphs. It’s the last one that’s throwing me. And watch the random capital “i”s in the 2nd paragraph. Blurb writing takes a bit of time 🙂
Sorry, the eye key on my computer ls stlll not worklng and l dldn’t get my new keyboard yet. l’m klnd of lukewarm on the thlrd paragraph, too. lt does take tlme. Thanks for your comments!
Idea sounds interesting. Blurb writing is not easy and take a lot of patience and practice. Lots of good suggestions above.
Wrltlng blurbs ls hard…no wonder l had so much trouble when the Harlequln edltor asked us to wrlte some blurbs at an RWA chapter meetlng about ten years ago and hated mlne.
They do say the best promo for a book is writing the next book. If this one has been out a year, having a new book, or even a short story or novella come out might boost sales of both. Best wishes!
Thanks, l have two comlng out that our hollday themed short storles and a novella that ls the sequel to “Mr. Tall, Tan…& Tasteless.” l also wrote two more books last year that are llve and thelr sales were even worse.
I’m right there with you in the blurb-writing department — it’s a definite struggle. This needs to be cleaned up a bit: “Then he meets gets a flier from…” Did he meet her or get a flier from her? It looks like you changed direction mid-sentence and forgot to fix the first part. (Easy to do and I’ve done it more than once.)
Thanks, l changed that llne. He does get a fller from her, but that’s how they meet, so l just changed lt back to “Then he meets…” Thanks for your lnput.
Blurbs are tough. Maybe change this sentence, “Unfortunately, Reese doesn’t need a man in her life. ” Not sure unfortunately is the best word. Makes me think unfortunate for who? Him or her? Why is it unfortunate? Maybe get right to the point like, “The last thing Reese needs is a man in her life.” or “Reese has no time for a man in her life.” Something more to the point of her situation.
Don’t get too discouraged with sales. It isn’t easy doing it yourself. I’d take the advice of the seasoned self-published authors on our list, check out their blogs, see how they do things.
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Thanks so much! That’s what l had originally (the last thing Reese needs is a man in her life). So l’m going back to it. The word unfortunately bothered me, too, but l guess by the time l changed it l’d looked at it for so long that unfortunately dldn’t bother me. Thanks a lot. Yep, selling books is hard … l’ve met so many new authors. Thanks for your help!