Snippet Sunday, 3/8–Stranded

Continuing on with my WIP, “Fools Fall in Love.” Last week, Malia and Carson were about to leave work when the power went out. Real life gave us a pretty bad snowstorm here in Ohio last week and gave me an adventure getting to work in my friend’s truck with my bad knee. Here’s what happens next to Malia and Carson:

Carson rushed back in, a concerned look on his face when he saw that she was staring at her Smart Phone. “I couldn’t even get out of the parking lot,” he said. “It’s terrible walking and my car…”
“The power’s out all over Washington County. What should we do?”
“I guess we’d better stay here. I can take some pictures and we can run with it for this week’s edition. My camera’s in the car.”
“What if somebody sees us?”
“I think most everybody left. Besides, if I’m taking pictures, I’m actually working, and you could write up a story about the weather, so we wouldn’t be dating.” He raised his black eyebrows. “There are a lot better ways to spend the evening than stuck here with you, believe me.”
“I know.” A hint of a smile crossed his face. “Don’t worry, Malia. I hate you!”
Malia gave an involuntary shudder, but not because of what he’d said. If he had added “now take off your clothes” to his “I hate you,” she might have complied. Maybe nobody would see him, but he was making it awfully hard to ignore her fantasies.
All feedback is greatly appreciated.


25 responses to “Snippet Sunday, 3/8–Stranded

  1. siobhanmuir

    Great snippet, Nancy. I really enjoyed his logic. 🙂

  2. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Love Malia’s inner thoughts. Sounds like she has thing for him.

  3. Interesting snippet. I wonder how much of what he said is true…

  4. chellecordero

    The beginnings of an intriguing love/hate relationship? Good snippet.

  5. Interesting dialogue … wonder how that’s going to pan out for these two.

  6. I love this set-up, Nancy!

    She’s really upset over that rule; I sincerely doubt that anyone is going to think they’re staying at work just to fraternize. This isn’t a date, it’s survival! 🙂

  7. I like the self-justifications here about “it’s not dating.” 😀

  8. I’m sure he hate her so much and they are obviously not dating, nobody will ever get confused lol.

  9. Great snippet. Loved the playful banter.

  10. Ouch! I feel for her here. Love her reaction.

  11. elainecsc2013

    Nice setup. Interesting things could happen when you’re snowed in.

  12. An interesting setup! Stuck in a storm with a man she’s attracted to. Wonder if he really hates her…

  13. Classic set-up here, with a twist that makes it your own. Should be interesting to see what develops between these two.

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