Snippet Sunday, 7/5/15. #1 Taming Toby–Jamie’s kitty

Here’s snippet #1 for all you Toby and Jamie fans—we’re back in Jamie’s POV—she’s going to see Toby again and pick up her new kitten. I found a big mistake in last week’s snippet—Zoe’s age, so I’ll have to change it. Re-writes, re-writes…
I might have gone over here, but otherwise, it ended in a weird spot. Thanks in advance for your feedback!
Jamie returned to the floating vet clinic the next evening. After work she’d stopped at Blatt’s Food Emporium and gotten supplies she needed for a kitten. All the cat supplies were in the back of her car. She walked to Toby’s clinic where he was waiting on deck.
“He’s all ready for you,” Toby said. Jamie looked into his emerald eyes. She inhaled the scent of clean laundry and soap as she stepped closer to retrieve the feline. “Have you picked out a name yet?”
Jamie sighed and took the kitten from him, not missing the warmth when their hands touched. “No. I’m stuck. My great-grandma Ellie had a cat named Major Gregory and I thought about naming him that, but I also like Captain Ramage…”
“Another sea novel character?” Jamie nodded. Toby looked at the cat, and then at Jamie. “Maybe I can help. You can’t just call him ‘hey, you,’ right?”
“No.” She couldn’t help looking at Toby. She loved his auburn hair and the taut muscles that stretched across his tall frame. He wore a T-shirt that said “Immediate Pleasures,” jeans and brown work boots.

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12 responses to “Snippet Sunday, 7/5/15. #1 Taming Toby–Jamie’s kitty

  1. I don’t know — I think “Hey you” works well for a name for a kitten. (“Hey, you little cutie.” “Hey! You get out of that!” “Hey, you! Eat your own breakfast and leave mine alone.”)

  2. LOL–I say all of those to my cat, Jay, all the time. Thanks for reading, P.T.

  3. A fun snippet, always a challenge to come up with a good name for a pet.

  4. Karen Michelle Nutt

    Can’t wait to find out what kitty’s name is going to be. I have to say, I like the way you described the guy, and his T-shirt made me chuckle. 🙂

  5. Oh my! The T-shirt! I’m sure he picked it up on purpose.

  6. The t-shirt phrase is a nice touch considering what she is thinking about. LOL! I hope the kitty gets a cute name. I’m sure they’ll come up with something creative.

  7. Very nice. You’ve established the right tone & feel for your story…

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